Sample Essay J

Everyone should have read the sample in class by now. The B-day kids had some time to work with the grader’s comments but for the sake of continuity, I am going to go over what you should do with it so bear with me if you have already done some of this.

Get out your rubric. Read it. Then read sample J. Do your own personal evaluation of it using the rubric. Then look at the scorer’s comments. You will see that the essay wasn’t terrible nor was it great. Now consider for each scoring comment what the author should have/could have done to make their essay better. In class on B-day we started writing that out on the paper. I am encouraging you to do that/finish the essay scoring so that you have some processing practice thinking like a grader. I will state right now that I am not going to collect this paper. It is excellent practice for you and it will certainly help prepare you for the actual essay itself. Think of it this way, how often do you think your favorite performer/athlete/artist practices something with no one watching or counting? I’d love to have a conversation about this during the exam time, and if you thought to put this in your Comp book, well, who knows what might happen?

sample J

scorer’s comments for J